Tuesday, February 21, 2012

Trifecta: Fool

I have a good friend who is also a blogger, Kim at Let Me Start By Saying, who is involved with a few writing groups that provide weekly prompts. I was inspired by one of her recent pieces, Snow White in 33 Words. I think it's time I gave these writing exercises a try.

I'm starting with the group that hosted the prompt that inspired the very abridged Snow White. The group is known as Trifecta, a curated workshop that provides one-word prompts once a week, as well as a unique weekend prompt. The one-word prompt exercise challenges participants to write a piece using the third definition of that word as found in the Mirriam Webster's Online Dictionary. 

This week, it's fool. A word I feel unashamedly intimate with. Here's the third entry in the online definition:
 - a harmlessly deranged person or one lacking in common powers of understanding


  
And here's my poetic take:



I think that I shall never see
Parent who lord of fool shall be.

These half-sized gambolers mind not sense.
Grown-up cares! They thrive on nonsense.
Flip flops in the blustering snow.
Toys are planted in hopes theyll grow.

In our castle, our mundane house,
Queen is trumped by scurrying mouse.
As maid she sweeps the crumbs and bits,
That fools remake in scant minutes.

The king himself is foolish found
When tickles bring him to the ground.
Wild crying fits he sighs about,
“Come in? I thought you wanted out?”

They think us parents fools, but no,
We rubber; they glue. That is so
That when their offspring come in time,
Fools their children will make of mine.

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Hey howdy Ninja Mom readers. Thanks for stopping in.


 

33 comments:

  1. What a kick!
    You make the home-keeping sound somewhat magical. Nicely done.

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    1. I liked the flip-flops in the snow and the toys planted as though they could grow. Reading this makes me want to call my mom and apologize!

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    2. Thanks, ladies. I wish I didn't take those examples from real life.

      I have called to apologize; my God does mom deserve it.

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  2. "We rubber; they glue" = my favourite line.
    Like.

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    1. Me too! You know me so well.

      I was actually worried that it would come off soooo childish I almost took it out. Then I remembered who I am and thought, "hells no, it stays."

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  3. This is superb. "Fools their children will make of mine" is spot-on. Love it!

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  4. Thanks! That was one of the first lines I wrote and then I worked back from there and I got to the beginning and decided to rip off Joyce Kilmer's "Trees." Well, borrow, not rip off, that's harsh.

    I hadn't remembered until I looked it up, but the Kilmer poem has "fool" in it, too.

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    1. I just looked up Kilmer's poem. Very nice borrow, and how appropriate that 'fool' is in both of your poems. I just blogged a silly poem myself. But it's nowhere near this caliber, parody and humor or not. It IS so good!

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  5. And you told me JUST last week that you can't do poetry. Methinks the lady doth fib.

    Love this, love the King being taken down by tickles, the flip-flops/toys lines could stand alone, they are that perfect. And the last 2 lines? Parental justice perfectly put.

    This is so, so good I can't stand it. I'm so glad you jumped in. I'm hoping to get mine done today...fun! And thanks for the shout-out!

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    1. Thank you very much for the good review! I am scared witless of poetry because I think doing it well is really hard. But this is part parody and all humor, so that made it much easier.

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    2. You kicked ass and took names. Seriously. I'm very proud!

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  6. So true! A wonderful ode to parenthood.

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    1. I have not been in charge since 2005. And here I thought I was head of the house.

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  7. I called my Mom to apologize - several times after I became a Mama.

    My own adult daughters have called me to apologize - I'm sure their progeny will carry on the tradition. :)

    thanks for joining us.

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    1. Very glad to have jumped in. And thanks for the reminder that some day my apology call is coming.

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  8. I'm not usually one for poetry, classic or otherwise, but I enjoyed this. Made me smile.

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    1. Thanks for saying so! Smiles were the intended outcome.

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  9. This is fabulous! I love poetry, although I can't write it worth a damn. This is fantastically vivid, gorgeous and entertaining. Very well worth the read. Great job!

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    1. So glad you liked it! I love poetry, too, and don't usually attempt it because it intimidates me.

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  10. I enjoyed the rhymes and the kids' viewpoints! I remember living in the world of 'giants.'

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    1. At 5'1" I keep imagining the time when my kids will be taller than I am, and I will live among giants again.

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  11. My one criticism is that I wish you'd rhymed bits with tits. But this is probably more appropriate.

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    1. Men they have have their dangly bits,
      And women woo with upright tits.
      But both, in time, will find their junk
      By gravity has soooo been punk'd.

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  12. "Parent who lord of fool shall be"
    I love the Shakespearean feeling with the modern context. This is expertly done.

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    1. I don't think I'm capable of separating "Shakespeare" and "Fool." There's no secret I'm ripping off tons of poets here. Kilmer, Shakespeare. Um, maybe that cat who wrote the Nantucket limerick. Who knows where the parody ends and the plagiarism begins?

      Thanks for the compliment!

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  13. Thanks for linking up to this week's Trifecta Challenge. Welcome aboard! This is a really clever take on the prompt. My favorite line was about the toys planted in hopes they'll grow. My kids are burying rocks this week, with the same hopes. I really your response here. I clearly need to take some time to stumble around your blog a bit. Hope to see you back for the weekend challenge.

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    1. I intend to return for the weekend, likely to not succeeded as well asi seem to have here. Eh, the blogosphere's a good place to get egg on one's face.

      Thanks for stumbling. You can try my other blog, too. Http://www.ninjamomblog.com

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  14. roflmao! Perfect poem for the life of parents.

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    1. I couldn't think of better deranged, harmless, lacking in common sense fools than children. Except their parents.


      Thanks for the love!

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  15. I love the crumb reference and how fast they come back after sweeping them up! I was just pondering that tonight as I dragged the vacuum out for the third time today. Great job!

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  16. What a creative take!
    "We rubber; they glue. That is so
    That when their offspring come in time,
    Fools their children will make of mine."

    Living for that last line! Ellen

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  17. I love your poem. Personally, I think rhyming is way more impressive than those supposedly highbrow non-rhyming poems! So fun to think about our grandchildren doing to our kids what they have done to us.

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  18. I loved this! Very fun and rompish, I was tickled to the floor.

    (Fran, aka FGHart)

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